Tuesday, January 4, 2011

Chapter 3...

(Please remember that not all of this is edited yet :P  Disregard any grammatical errors!)

The Lady gasped at the unexpected, thundering noise and made a slight jump back as something eerie and black begins to breaking through the surface of the bog. Inside, she felt herself quivering with fear at the gross freakish-looking animal that raised its head from the murky waters, but she could not bring herself to turn away. She was fascinated.
'It's the Bog Beast,' the Knight says quietly, while still holding the medallion to the sun. 'Whoever is holding the medallion is safe from it, and can command it to do as he pleases.'
Thus explaining this to the Lady, the Knight points to the magical orb that, which, due to the monster's massive body creating such waves in the water, began to disappear beneath the surface. The Beast slowly makes its way to the green object,and the Lady could still not figure out how it moved. It wasn't as if it was swimming...more like gliding. It's black leathery body almost filled the entire swamp and the stench was almost too great to bear. The Lady covered her nose and mouth with her white handkerchief and watched as the Beast finally reached the magic orb and took it in its mouth.
...the Beast's massive head lifts from the vile waters of the Bog and extends towards the Knight on a long, serpentine neck. Showing no fear, the Knight stares back into the creature's one large, glowing yellow eye placed just above its blunt maw, and no discomfort at the rotten stench of the creature's fetid breath, the Knight reaches out with his free hand to take the glowing, green orb from between the monsters massive, rounded teeth. Slowly backing away the Knight stops at the Lady's side. Forcing her eyes away from the massive, slime covered Beast, the Lady glances up at the Knight's face. For a brief second the Knight meats her gaze and gives her another roguish grin along with a wink before returning his attention to the Bog Beast.
"Now return to your sleep, Beast." The Knight whispers as he stares into the menacing, glowing yellow eye of the creature. . .
The Beast slowly backs away from the Knight and Lady and slowly sinks back into the mire. He pauses, with his eye still at the surface, and stared at the Lady for a second, until the Knight whispers to him to depart, but in a more forceful tone. The Beast blinks once, and then,with a loud splash - that the Lady wondered where it came from – disappeared 'neath the darkness of the bog.


'Now then!' the handsome Knight turns to the lady, 'Your orb!' He hands it to her with a bow and another roguish grin.

The Lady looks at it, without a word, until the Knight raises his head and looks at her, puzzlingly. 'Well, what is it, m'lady?'

'It is a bit dirty, don't you think?' she asks.

'Oh! I guess it is at that!' the Knight replies, nonchalantly, and turns to his faithful steed that had been standing near amidst the whole episode. Taking from his saddle bag a blue vase, the Knight lifts the cork from its spout and says, 'This will make anything look brand new!'

copyrighted 2010, Miss Raquel

3 of your thoughts:

Lily said...

I like it!!! Do keep posting more. :D

in Christ,
~Lily

Lucia Marie said...

Haha~~

..You guys are funny! :D So is this thing still continuing?? Love it so far, if so!

..Oh, and thanks for all of your complimenting comments :) on my FF Week posts! <3 Awwe..you are so sweet!

Much Love,
Lu

Tyler said...

All right, this is a great scene. I love the descriptive language. Eagerly waiting for the continuation of the story...

Oh, and the lady at the Christian bookstore that we were talking about is getting her book published.